.... your essays were... good. Ummmm, examples from the text? Next time put some of those in. You also tended to jump around with tenses. For example, "The Price family changes their attitude while they lived in the Congo." I can see how it kind of would be right, but you just went from present to past in the same sentence and you mostly want to keep your writings in the same tense. And the last thing is that on the leisure essay, it looks like you were trying to finish up quickly and a lot of your sentences just aren't conducive to what I think you were trying to say.
Well the writing may of not be very articulated, but I enjoyed the basis of it. I agree some examples from the text would of been nice, but there is no way you would of been able to add those had this been a real AP exam. That is unless you either remembered them, or was allowed to have the book near you. Also try not to jump around so much. I think you have a great mind, you just need to be able to plan what you are thinking more.
Not the best of essays but I am trying to get better in my writing.
ReplyDelete.... your essays were... good. Ummmm, examples from the text? Next time put some of those in. You also tended to jump around with tenses. For example, "The Price family changes their attitude while they lived in the Congo." I can see how it kind of would be right, but you just went from present to past in the same sentence and you mostly want to keep your writings in the same tense. And the last thing is that on the leisure essay, it looks like you were trying to finish up quickly and a lot of your sentences just aren't conducive to what I think you were trying to say.
ReplyDeleteI'll give the first one a 3 and the second one a 4
ReplyDeleteWell the writing may of not be very articulated, but I enjoyed the basis of it. I agree some examples from the text would of been nice, but there is no way you would of been able to add those had this been a real AP exam. That is unless you either remembered them, or was allowed to have the book near you. Also try not to jump around so much. I think you have a great mind, you just need to be able to plan what you are thinking more.
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